Antigone Cadmus

Hey, Colleen. :oops: Sorry about taking so long to review this. I've been pretty busy lately. Since you've already gotten a lot of nit-picky reviews, I am going to be ...

Sorry for taking so long, Becki! Here's your review! Aela kept glancing at the boy, taking note of his small stature and scruffy down hair that fell into his eyes. ...

When I was visiting my friend this summer, one of his cousins came from Germany for a vacation. My friend lives in the south, and when his cousin saw a ...

So this is the end of your prologue... I think I'll do a review of the prologue overall. Location, Location Maybe this is because I read each section of SP ...

Ah. I shall explain. So here are the two sentences: "Run!" cried the boy. "Aela, Aela." Worry crept into his voice. Cried is the verb for your sentence. Imagine dialogue ...

Ah. I shall explain. So here are the two sentences: "Run!" cried the boy. "Aela, Aela." Worry crept into his voice. Cried is the verb for your sentence. Imagine dialogue ...

Hey, Mike! Nice to meet you. This story looks really great -- I would love to critique it. Unfortunately, this is just too long! If you are just reading it, ...

Done, Becki! Anyone else? :wink:

Back again for review part two! Laughing merrily as she flipped her skirt and petticoat around in time to her continued skipping, Aela came to a clearing in the forest. ...

Here I am again. ^_^ You only need to capitalize "Father" when it is taking the place of his name. For example: "Hello, Father!" If you were saying, "Hello, John!" ...

Banned because you misspelled "puppets". Two p's! Not one! :winki:

'Tis done, Becki!

Hey, Becki W! Here as requested! I guess my last reviews of your work must have helped. ^_^ The leaves rustling, some unable to hold onto the branches any longer ...

Hey, Love Is Limitless! I'm Sakura. Welcome to Young Writers Society (affectionately known as YWS). Of course, there are a few rules you should know... -- No chatspeak. This is ...

Hmm. If the MCs are innocent crime wise, you could have a friend/family member's well-being threatened.